Sunday, February 28, 2016

Reading Diary Week 7: West African Folktales Part II

West African Folktales, a collection from African students at a teacher training center in Accra, the capital of Ghana

I think I made a mistake in my reading last week... I guess I should have done West African Folktales, parts I and II for the two readings, and then done Brer Rabbit this week, but instead I did part A of West African, and part A of Brer Rabbit... so now I guess I'll just do part B of both sections!

Why the Moon and the Stars Receive Their Light From the Sun: In this story, the son calls out to his father in the forest, and hears the reply, "Yes, son." I like the idea of using this deception and false hope in a story. The son thinks he hears his father's voice when he's lost, but it's really the voice of a deadly dragon. I might even tie it into how we as Christians have to know our Father's voice, and not be deceived by the devil.

"...to make a strong rope ladder. One end of this he intended to throw up to heaven, trusting that the gods would catch it and hold it fast, while he and his fellow-prisoners mounted." I love the leap of faith the spider takes here! It's always fun to have something like that in a story, too. It leaves the reader in suspense, but it's also relatable.

When they threw the ladder into the air and it caught, I had a feeling the dragon caught it on the other end, and they would be eaten as they climbed to their "safety." This might be something I use in my own story, a group of people working hard to escape but who are really getting closer to the mouth of the beast in the process.

How the Tortoise Got its Shell tells a story of why tortoises have a shell (obviously). I've always liked these "explanation" tales, and I may do one for my story, though probably not about a turtle. Maybe the origins of mermaids, or why rhinos have their big tusks...
(Rhino

In The Ungrateful Man, one man is given many riches by a rat, a panther, and a serpent. When accused of stealing the king's wealth, no one believes his testimony of how he actually became rich. These are some of the most frustrating things in a story to me, when the protagonist has done nothing wrong, yet can't convince anyone otherwise because the circumstances are so outrageous. Even though this type of conflict bothers me, it's a good way to entice readers and keep them searching for justice as they read the story.

Wednesday, February 24, 2016

Week 6 Storytelling: Don't kill me, Mr. Voldemort



My body shuddered in fear as the ghastly pale, skeletal figure slowly drew his wand from his robe. He was one of the most powerful wizards in all of fiction—how was I supposed to defeat him?
Landing face-to-face with the Dark Lord was not my intention when I fell into the book.
That is, I never intended to fall in at all.
I had just finished my cup of tea, wishing James was still around to tell me which part of the world the leaf originated in, even if I would never remember. My eyelids had fluttered shut as I read a passage from my favorite book, wishing I could be part of that world—of flying on broomsticks and half-giant friends and mischievous night explorations down castle hallways—when I suddenly was.
Inky letters flew past me, and it felt as if I had fallen from a great height, and suddenly—I was in the story.
Except I hadn’t landed in the scene where Harry chases Malfloy on his broomstick, or meets the friendly Hagrid for the first time, or even when he’s sentenced to detention by the sniveling Snape.
No, instead I stood face-to-face with the Dark Lord, my memory filling in the gaps as I took in my surroundings—the dark forest, the death-eaters surrounding me, the general dismal gloom in the air—I was in the last book, one of the last scenes. Except Harry was nowhere to be seen. It was just me—standing before Voldemort, trembling as his beady eyes bore into my own.
I patted the pockets of my sweatpants frantically. Surely, I’d at least have…
I had a wand. I drew it and pointed it the pale man, my heart pounding out of my chest. And then it occurred to me—
I couldn’t do magic.
At least, I was pretty sure I couldn’t.  
I couldn’t for the life of me remember any of the spells used in the books—all the Latin had swam away, along with the inky letters that made this story so comfortingly…fiction.
“What will it be then, weakling?” Voldemort’s voice was colder than the icy air numbing my fingers. “Cruciartis?”
The excruciating pain spell. No thank you, Sir Voldemort.
“I…I—” Sweat poured down my forehead despite the chill in the air. I knew there was no way I’d have the strength to fight him on my own—even with the wand. I was tired and weak, a feeling only intensified by the loneliness that surrounded me lately.
He scowled and straightened his wand, aiming for my chest. “Speak, coward.”
He was going to kill me.
And then I remembered why I loved Harry so much, and why I’d been drawn back to the books these past few months.
Harry is alone, for much of his life. Even after he makes friends at Hogwarts, he goes home to a cruel Aunt and Uncle and longs for his parents—both of whom are dead.
Like my own, after that awful drunk driver…
A lump wells in my throat.
—And Sirius, his godfather, his friend…also lost, like my James.
All his love seemed to have passed on, and lately, I can’t help but feel like everyone I care about is gone, too, and they’re just waiting for me on the other side.
“Please, Voldemort,” I whisper with tears in my eyes. “Please, just—don’t kill me. Please.”
His pale face twists into what I can only guess is a smile. “You don’t want to die, hm?”
“No, please. Please—torture me, or, or control me—whatever you want, but please—don’t kill me.”
Voldemort smiled and wrapped his spindly fingers tighter around his gnarled wand. “Ha. You fool…Avada Kadavra!”
Green light shot from his wand and I raised my own, ready to control it with any ounce of magical instinct that might live in me.
But his spell hit my heart, and the forest disappeared. The dim light and gnarled trees were replaced with a piercing white light and…voices.
I turned toward the sound, hopeful.
It worked.
My mother and father were there, eyes brimming with tears. And James, he rushed at me before I could get a good look at him, bear-hugging me to death before he pulled back to kiss me.
For a moment, I forgot where I was, what was happening, lost in relief and longing. But then my dad stepped forward, gently touching my shoulder.
“You have to go back,” he said. “It’s not time yet.”
“I know,” I said, though my heart ached to stay with them, talk to them, be with them again. “I came because I need your help.”
My mom smiled and nodded. The three of them surrounded me, each one placing their hands on my back as I turned back the way I’d come. I glanced back at James—one last time—before I stepped toward the light, each of their hands giving me a little bit more strength.
The light disappeared and the sudden blackness punched my vision, but I stood firm, holding my wand against Voldemort’s spell with everything I had in me.
A hideous scream pierced the air as he noticed the change—the force of my spell against his, the sudden life brought back to my body.
My body tensed and shook, straining under the effort to hold my force of light steady against his darkness, a great ball of light glowing and growing in the air between us.
And then it was gone.
I fell forward onto something hard, my brain pulsing as if it had its own heartbeat. I glanced up—a photo of my parents smiled at me from its place on my lavender wall, and the sharp corner of a book jabbed into my cheek. I was back, lying on my bed, alive, in my own world.
Had it been a dream?
I sat up, and something jabbed my leg. Slowly, I reached my hand into my pocket.
The wand.
I pulled it out and placed it gently on my windowsill, beneath my smiling parents and the photo of James and me on a picnic. I laid my head against my pillow, grateful for its softness and security, and feeling—for the first time in months—a little bit less alone in the world.




Bibliography: How Mr. Rabbit was too Sharp for Mr. Fox, by Joel Chandler Harris (1881) & Harry Potter, by JK Rowling (1997-2007)

Author's Note: After listening to the story of Brer Rabbit, I wanted to incorporate the "don't throw me into the briar patch" trick into my own story. In this story about Brer Rabbit, Rabbit is caught by Brer Fox, and Fox keeps asking, "What should I do to you, Brer Rabbit?" because Rabbit has been so cocky and uncatchable before, and Fox wants revenge. Fox says, "I could drown you..." and Rabbit says, "Oh, yes, please, drown me, Mr. Fox, drown me real good! Just whatever you do, please don't throw me into the briar patch!" They go on like this several times, Fox naming a torture and Rabbit agreeing, just so long as he isn't thrown into the briar patch. At the end, Fox of course throws him in the briar patch, because he wants to harm him as much as he can. But, that's exactly what Brer Rabbit wanted, because he was born and raised in the briar patch.

So I took Brer Rabbit's trick and applied it to a story about a young woman who falls into a book and is suddenly face to face with Voldemort. SPOILER ALERT: In the last book, Harry faces Voldemort, and he essentially dies. But while he's "dead," he sees his parents and Sirius—all the people he loves who have died—and seeing them gives him the strength and encouragement to defeat Voldemort, the all-powerful evil wizard. (Actually, he sees them before he dies with the Sorcerer's Stone, and then he dies and sees Dumbledore at King's Cross Station...because Harry had to die because he was a horcrux, a piece of Voldemort's soul, and to defeat Voldemort, all of the pieces had to be destroyed...) but anyway. Those are the elements I took from Harry Potter for my story, so I guess I switched them around a little bit. I had my character die so she could gain strength from her loved ones and then defeat Voldemort. She tricked Voldemort, begging him not to kill her so that she could momentarily die to see her family and have them help her. 

Tuesday, February 23, 2016

Reading Diary: Week 6: Brer Rabbit

Brer Rabbit, by Joel Chandler Harris

I had to pick the Brer Rabbit stories! Mostly because my family loves Splash Mountain; it's a tradition now, any time we're in Disney, we have to ride it--preferably more than once. And we always tell the story of the time it rained and we got to ride seven times in a row. I mentioned it in my reading choices post a while back. So I'm interested to know more of the stories and history behind the ride, and if there are any discrepancies in the tales.

 ("Please, don't throw me into that briar patch!")

I know the instructions say to listen to the story because of the odd dialect, but I thought I'd try to read it anyway...and, yeah. There's no way. It's definitely an adjustment even listening to the story! Even though it's read in a more familiar dialect, it's still pretty southern, and since the character's are all "Brer" something, sometimes it's hard to keep track of who is doing what when I'm listening.

 "Ol' Man Nod' was writin' on my eyelids..." I've never heard this idiom before, and I love it! I love hearing the different ways people describe everyday events (like falling asleep) in different areas or different eras. It's also fun to try and create your own, something I'd like to try with my writing.

Turns out, the story Splash Mountain is based off of, How Mr. Rabbit Was Too Sharp for Mr. Fox, is pretty accurate! They added more details for the ride, of course, and the whole Zipadeedooda thing, but the basic plot and ending is the same. It might be interesting to re-write this story, with a different animal, or do a sci-fi/fantasy thing...

In the story of Why Mr. Opossum Loves Peace, two animals, the opossum and the coon, see a dog coming, and the oppossum asks the coon, "What are you gonna do?" and the coon says, "I'm gonna stay here next to you! What are you gonna do?" I like the idea of having several characters all rely on each other to do something to escape a villain, but they don't tell each other, and it backfires.



Monday, February 22, 2016

Reading Diary: Week 6: West African Folktales

West African Folktales, by William H. Barker and Cecilia Sinclair, with drawings by Cecilia Sinclair

I chose the West African Folktales because they tell the stories of Anansi the spider, and when I was about eight or nine, I took an acting class, and our big production at the end was a tale about Anansi—and I was the spider! I don't remember much of the story, but I'm hoping the reading will jog my memory...

How Wisdom Became the Property of the Human Race: The beginning of this story, about a man who possesses all the wisdom and people come to him to get wisdom, reminds me of King Solomon of the Bible, the wisest man who ever lived, and how kings and queens traveled from all over to seek his counsel. I could write a story of the two men meeting, or how they are the same person, and the stories mixed into two different people...

Even the second paragraph, where Father Anansi (father of wisdom) takes back the wisdom he has given and stores it in a pot, reminds me of Proverbs, where wisdom is frequently spoken of as if it were a physical thing, or even a woman. Maybe I could write a story about how the wisdom he collected and sealed in a pot became the woman wisdom spoken of in Proverbs...

At the end, as Anansi is climbing a tree to store his wisdom out of reach, he realizes he can't because the pot is swinging in front of him. So his son calls from below, "Why don't you put the pot on your back?" and he realizes he doesn't have all the wisdom. I like the idea of the wisdom coming from a child; so simple and innocent, not polluted by bitterness or selfishness, and because of this, he is able to see more clearly.

Anansi and Nothing: Here, Anansi borrows a rich man's clothes to get wives, and the rich man is left in rags, and so he gets a poorer wife whose Anasi's wives laugh at. But when they return home, the rich man's wife has all she needs, and Anansi's wives have nothing. I like the idea of using this theme—how it may appear that a person has nothing, or they really do have nothing at the time—but it's only because they're wise and saving for the future, or they simply don't boast about what they have.

Friday, February 19, 2016

Famous Last Words: Week 5

Geeze, February, where did you go?? I know it's a shorter month, but still. I can't believe it's almost over, and that it's almost March...isn't March when we have spring break??

I'm already almost halfway done with my novella (at least according to word count). We're scheduled to finish them before spring break, which just seems nuts to me. But I'm glad, too, to have such big project completed and out of the way before we're barely halfway done with the semester. Everything after that will seem like a piece of peanut butter cake.

And still, I'm enjoying my writing! (I guess I should, since that's my major, and later possibly my profession...) I like this story better than my novel from last semester. I feel like I connect with the character better; probably because I gave her a little sister like mine, and although she has the ability to turn into any reptile, she lives in a "modern" world on a magical country—unlike my novel, where the character was taken from this world and ended up in a completely new, magical place. That was harder for me to write, because I had to create an entirely new world. And, well. I'm not God. It was like trying to create this...
(Map of Tolkien's Middle Earth)
(Tolkien's balrog

Versus trying to create something more like this:

Not to say the world of Harry Potter wasn't new in itself, but in my story, there are more elements of the real world that make it easier for me to make connections. 

I'm sure this doesn't make a whole lot of sense, but I get it. 

On another note, this writing has really made me want to reread Harry Potter... something I frequently long to do, but resist in order to make time for new stories. 

Sigh. Decisions. Book struggles. My to-read list grows every day. 

I wasn't super thrilled with my story for this week (in this class). Nothing really stuck out to me in the stories I read...at least, not in the sense that I found a new story I wanted to create from them. Maybe it was just because I've been so focused on my novella because that's something I'm pretty excited about. 

Maybe this is just a lesson to write more of my milestone before I write my story for this class; then, maybe, I won't just be itching to get back to writing my novella while I'm trying to think of a simpler short story.

That gives me an idea, though...I could write my stories from the perspective of characters in my novella! That might be fun, and it would give me a way to work on my novella (not directly, but some character development or scene setting) while writing a fun story for this class! Ooh, how writing makes my brain work. Thinking doesn't do much for me, but if I start writing it down, thoughts come clearer. 

I won't bother to talk about History of Journalism or my Health Promotion Evaluation class. Because...because.

Dance class, though! I wish I had a picture of our class dancing. It's an enjoyable class, if I'm not totally swamped by the time I get there. Our instructor, Rose, is great. She knows how to make it fun but teach us at the same time. She's also super pretty and enjoyable to watch. She was totally made to be a dancer. 

Things are good.  :)  I'm excited it's Friday, and my classes and work are going well. I can't complain! I want to find a venue soon, and that's a little frustrating, but I know it will work out when it needs to. On a random note, I've got the super-munchies. I want to eat everything. And no, I'm not high, and I also shouldn't be PMSing, so I don't know what it is. (I'm sure you wanted to know that.) 

Here is where I would insert a funny "eat everything!" meme if I could find one labeled for reuse, or knew how to create my own.




Wednesday, February 17, 2016

Thoughts and Comments

I feel like I really get the most out of a comment when someone makes specific references to my story. Someone mentioned a description of one of my characters, Leah (by name), and described the moment Leah came home, and how well she thought it worked with the story. She explained that it worked because it depicted a real-life situation in detail, and then went on to describe how it reminded her of her own family.

That's another thing that sticks out to me; when a person adds something of their own to the comment they make, rather than simply regurgitating information about my story or introduction. This commenter told me how it related to her own parents, and that helped me see how my story related to real life, and I was also assured that my view of the situation wasn't uncommon.

It's nice to hear people say, "How cool that you did this!" or "I loved your cake!" but when they give me a tidbit of (just an example) their own engagement story, or a little advice on taking trips to Disney or something, that gives me a reason to read it. Of course, I'll read all of them, but it's easy to skim something when it basically just repeats what you wrote.

I think I've done a pretty good job at commenting on others' stories and introductions. I usually end up asking the person a bunch of questions that come to mind, whether about their personal life or their reasons for different things they did in their writing. However, sometimes when nothing really sticks out to me in a story, it can be hard to come up with something to say that isn't simply regurgitating the facts about their story in compliment-form. In times like these, I try to think about what I would have done differently, and offer it, or think more about the formatting.

Storytelling Week 5: Mindy Heller Fails


"I'm sorry, Mindy, but you're failing this class.”

Mindy Heller dropped her head into her hands, stifling a sob. She looked up at Professor Higgins helplessly. "But how? I just don't understand—"

"Mindy, it's really not worth discussing any further. After all the emails, and phone calls, I'm spent. I'm sorry. You need to up your game if you want to make it in this class." His stiff salt-and-pepper mustache frowned at Mindy, and she sighed.

"Yes, sir." She picked her yellow backpack off the floor and left his office, shoulders sagging.

That week, Mindy took her study sessions into overdrive. She stayed up until two in the morning reading Professor Higgins’ notes, reviewing key terms, and looking up extra information online about reptile anatomy.

When Monday rolled around and Mindy went to the computer lab to take the next online quiz, she logged in with confidence, sure she would ace this one.

When she finished, she said a prayer over her grade, left the lab, and went right back to her books, prepping for the next quiz.

But on Tuesday night, Lily received an email from Professor Higgins.

She had failed the quiz.

His email blurred before her as tears welled in her eyes.

“I’m sorry, Mindy. You might consider dropping the class.”

Mindy’s breath caught in her throat. But I’m trying so hard! she thought. She didn’t understand what else she could possibly do.

But she studied harder, even when the next test material hadn’t been announced. Mindy read her Zoology II book like it was the Bible, carrying it with her on the bus, to other classes, and to bed.


I have to prove him wrong, she thought. I’m not a failure.

March rolled around and Test number three was on its way. Over the past month, Mindy had received a C on two homework grades and another D on a quiz. Nothing seemed to be working, but she was determined to make this test count—even if there was barely any way for her to pass the class now.

Because his class was online, and it was an upper-level class, Professor Higgins hosted all his quizzes and tests in the computer lab monitored by TA’s. Now, every time Mindy handed over her ID card, her stomach churned. The alien-like glow of the computer screens made her want to vomit.

But she knew this material.

Mindy clicked and read, clicked and read, and typed and read and clicked for an hour and a half, double-checking her answers before the TA announced the end of the test session. Only a few of the questions had stumped her, but she was positive all the others were correct. Taking a deep breath, she logged out, collected her ID from the TA, and left.

No sooner had she left the building than her phone pinged with an email. She held it close to her face, shielding her eyes from the sun.

It was Professor Higgins.

“Mindy, I would highly suggest you drop my class before it goes on your record. The last test did not help to improve your grade. My apologies. Best, PH”

Mindy’s breath caught in her throat.

How had he already collected the test grades?

Tears filled her eyes, and she rushed to a nearby bench. She wrapped her arms around her legs and wept softly into her knees.

“I’m not a failure,” she mumbled. “Mindy Heller is not a failure.”

“Mindy?” a voice chirped in front of her.

Mindy glanced up, where a tall, blonde woman with bright red lip stick stood in front of her. “Yes?” she asked, sniffing.

“Are you Mindy Heller?” The woman was smiling.

“Yes…”

“I’m Professor Higgins! Your Zo teacher! Since the class is online, I rarely get to meet my students, but I’m glad I ran across you! Your essay was superb!” she smiled encouragingly. “It’s nice to see something so well researched and thought-out. I could tell you put a lot of effort into it.”

Mindy’s brow crinkled. “You’re Professor Higgins? But I thought…” Mindy thought of the stiff man with the mustache, telling her she was failing. “I thought Higgins was a man?”

The woman laughed. “Oh, well I hope you don’t still think that! I know there's another Higgins on campus, though…why, were you looking for me?”

Mindy’s eyes widened as a realization dawned on her. This was a big campus. If there were two Higgins, there could be two Mindys. Even two Mindy Hellers.

“So…I’m not failing your class?” she asked hesitantly.

“Goodness, no! You’re doing excellent! I don’t see any reason for you not to finish this semester with an A, Mindy.”

Mindy smiled, standing. “Thanks,” she said. “But I think there’s another Mindy around here the other Higgins might need to talk to…Something must've gotten mixed up with the online systems.” She pulled up her email, squinting against the sun.

“Well, it was very nice to meet you!” Mindy’s Professor Higgins said, walking away. She twisted and called back, “Keep up the good work!”

“Thanks!” Mindy smiled to herself. “Will do.”



Bibliography: Turkish Fairy Tales, The Patience Stone and Patience Knife, by Ignacz Kunos (1913)

Author's Note: The original story tells of a young maiden working home alone, when a bird flies in and tells her, "Your fate is with the dead." She tells her mother about the experience, and her mother warns her to lock the doors the next day. But, the bird slips in through the window and tells the girl the same thing again. This happens three times, frightening the girl and the mother until the mother stays home with the girl, but the bird never returns. Then, three girls come and ask the young maiden to go out with them. She does, and a magic wall grows out of no where, separating her from her friends and her mother. She weeps, then the next day walks through a door in the wall to a palace, where she finds a corpse with a note that reads, "fan me every day for forty days, and then I will wake and the palace will be yours." So the maiden does as the note instructs, and on the fortieth day, another girl comes in. The maiden asks for her to take over for a moment so she can refresh herself, but when she returns, the body has awoken and taken the other girl for his wife, thinking the young maiden must be his new cook. The maiden laments her troubles to a stone, and it bubbles over as she weeps about her lost mother, her work in the palace, and now the girl who tricked her. The prince walks by and overhears her, and then makes sure she gets justice, taking her as his true wife.

From this story, I took the idea of a bad omen (you're failing the class) that was sort of "mistaken." At the end of the original story, the bird flies by and sings about how lovely the maiden's new life is. So I wanted to do the same with my story, sort of twist what the character thought was a bad omen into a mistake.

Tuesday, February 16, 2016

Reading Diary Week 5: Turkish Fairy Tales, Part II

Turkish Fairy Tales, by Ignacz Kunos

The Patience Stone and Patience Knife: I like the eerie foreshadowing in this story! The girl is told that her fate is with a dead person (three times by a bird), and her mother is finally so scared for her that she stays home with her... which makes me wonder if the mother will die now. I like the Twilight Zone sense of foreboding. I might base my story off of this one, and maybe just modernize it a little.

At the end of the second part, I was surprised to find that the maiden had "found her fate," instructions to earn a palace, on the body of a dead person. I was expecting her to lose someone close to her.

Toward the end, the young maiden laments all her troubles to a "patience stone," and as she describes how she was given a bad omen, separated from her mother, and deceived by the Arab girl, the stone bubbles up and bursts because it can't handle all the injustice and anguish. I like the idea of using an inanimate object to sort of take on or symbolize the events in a character's life... and even do it literally, like in this story. Maybe my character will have a necklace that grows heavier and heavier as she faces more troubles, and eventually it's too heavy to carry... (that kind of reminds me of The Pilgrim's Progress, actually.) 

At the end, the bird that delivered the "terrible omen," flies in singing happily about how the  maiden has found her kizmet. I also like this idea; to use something that was symbolized something negative to express something positive at the end of the story.

The Imp of Well: I love this quote, and the word choice: "Nearby lived a woodcutter who, besides his poverty, had nothing but a most cantankerous wife." The "besides his poverty" is funny because most people don't view poverty as something you own, or "possess," like you would a wife (in those days), but to phrase it this way draws attention to it in a clever way, rather than simply saying, "He had nothing."

At first, it bothered me that I didn't know who this first-person omniscient narrator was, but I think it works for the story, kind of like C.S. Lewis did the Narnia (I think it was first person, occasionally, like this one). "Whereon a great uproar ensued, and how either escaped with their life is more than I can understand."

Monday, February 15, 2016

Reading Diary Week 5: Turkish Fairy Tales, Part I

Turkish Fairy Tales by Ignacz Kunos's

Fear: "The youth, binding a rope round his body, dived to the bottom of the sea. There he discovered that the Daughter of the Sea (Deniz Kyzy) was shaking the vessel. He fell upon her, flogged her soundly, and drove her away. Then, appearing at the surface, he asked: 'Is this fear?'"

One thing I'm not a fan of in old folk tales and fables is the general lack of description. I understand that the stories were usually told to teach a lesson, and it helps that they're short, but I feel like a descriptive tid-bit here and there would be helpful, to put the reader in the story. With this story (and I just used this paragraph as an example), I feel like I'm floating on the outside of the story, watching it unfold from afar, rather than being in it. Again, I guess that's the difference between folk tales and novels, but I think the same principles can be applied. I've read novels that feel "far away" and I've also read short stories that put you in the story very well.

I was kind of surprised at the ending to the fear story. Surprised, and a little disappointed. I was wondering how the author was going to find something to scare the youth at this point, which was good suspense, but then it fell flat. To me, a bird flying out of a soup bowl is startling, but I'm not sure it's fear. Maybe if the author had described the youth's reaction: heart racing, frozen, whatever, it would have seemed "scarier," and made for a more satisfying ending.

Wizard Dervish: In this story, the author tells of three separate times one of the characters turns herself and her husband into an object so a witch can't find them. But it happens three times in a row, each with the same pattern and the same outcome. Usually in fables, the last one is surprising or something... but this just seemed monotonous.

This story also has a very odd ending, with not much satisfaction. He starts with one wife, then ends up with another...which I guess was the dervish's plan all along? Maybe? It just sort of... ends. So one thing I want to be sure of with my writing is to satisfy the readers at the end of the story! Bring it all back together, draw some ties in.
(The man who ends up with two wives, sort of. And is also an oven, a pond, and a garden.)



Wednesday, February 10, 2016

Week 4 Review


 

I really love this meme because it reminds me of myself. I've always been a bit snarky, and I love grammar and writing. So getting back at a teacher or parent (or just messing with them in general), with grammar is totally something I would do. 

Also, I had no idea today was Ash Wednesday! My best friend grew up Catholic, and she usually mentions it, but... maybe she forgot, too.

Storytelling: Week 4: The Baby Monkey



Thulu sat at the base of the fig tree, nibbling on one of the tiny fruits as his mother plucked bugs from his hair.

“I can’t chew it, Mama!” he said, smacking the hard fruit between his wide monkey lips.

“That’s because it’s not ripe, dear,” said. “You have to wait for the sun to draw out the juice. That’s why we leave them at the base of the tree.”

Thulu crinkled his brow and tossed the fruit aside. He was hungry, and he’d eaten all the ripened fruits inside their fenced-in jungle.

His mother’s hands froze on his head, gripping his fur.

“Ow!” he squealed.

“Sh!” Kurani reached her long skinny fingers around her son’s head and covered his mouth. “He has returned,” she whispered.

Several yards away, a young man in a long brown robe stepped between two trees. His yellow-brown eyes gleamed, and he grinned at the sight of the fruit laying on the ground. “Ah, you have done well, my little monkeys!” he said, rubbing his hands together. “I didn’t even have to search for them this time, you little rascals.”

The brown-robed man was not one of the monkey’s keepers, who pet their fur and taught them tricks. This man was a monk. Monks did not usually visit the monkey cages.

Meartar, Thulu’s father, rushed at the brown-robed man, baring his teeth and screeching. Meartar’s shoulders were bonier than they had been a few weeks ago, and his eyes were dull with hunger.

The monk grabbed a stick and swatted Meartar’s face, sending the monkey rolling against a tree. Thulu cried out in fear—he had seen this man steal their fruit, but until now, the man hadn’t hurt his family. Heat rushed through Thulu’s tiny hands, and he scowled, bracing himself. His mother tightened her grip on his shoulders and held him back.

“No, Thulu.”

The monk scooped his arm across the ground, gathering the precious purple fruit the monkeys lived by—muju fruits, found in the highest branches, where only Thulu’s family could reach them. Meartar growled and ran at the monk again, but the man slipped through the gate before Meartar could scratch his smug face.

Thulu turned to his mother. “What does he want with our food, Mama?”

Kurani’s golden fur slackened across her face as she sighed. “I don’t know, baby. We might never know, from here inside the gates.”

“I wish Lady Sunshine and her father knew about the brown-robed man.” Thulu crossed his arms across his bony chest. “They would not let him steal our food.”

“I know, Sweetie.” Kurani stroked her son’s head, then reached out her other arm as Meartar lumbered closer. She held them close, and they fell asleep.

*

That night, when the moon was high and the trees had quieted their leaf lullaby, Thulu opened his eyes. He watched the gate the man had come through, wondering. Slowly, he wiggled out of his mother’s arms and loped across the yard. The gate was wooden, with gaps in between the planks about six inches wide.

“I could fit through the cracks,” Thulu thought. He’d never needed to before, because all he needed were Mama and Papa, but now he wondered…

He pushed his little shoulder against the gate, the wood scratching his downy fur. He stuck his head through, sucked in a breath and pushed against the planks. Splinters grabbed at his spindly thighs and pointy heels, but he fell with a soft thump on the other side.

Thulu sat up and picked a splinter from his calf, hardly noticing the tiny prick of pain.

To his left, narrow footprints accompanied a larger, pair of prints that trailed toward the village. To his right, fat footsteps disappeared into the brush. Thulu looked back at his mother and father, sleeping heavily on the barren ground. He took a deep breath and ran to the right.

*

Thulu found the brown-robed man next to a fire in the woods, piling their fruit as he sang to himself,

“Make the king fall to his knees,

He can’t resist with gifts like these,

Jewels inside the precious Muju,

Now he’ll do as I tell him to.”

Next to the basket of fruit was a basket of jewels. In it, Thulu recognized a necklace with a golden sun charm—it was Lady Sunshine’s. Thulu growled as he peered through the bushes. This man was no monk at all—he was a traitor—and a thief!

He couldn’t let this man fool their good king. So the baby monkey ran back through the woods, into the city, and up to the palace gates, where he waited for morning.

As the sun smiled on the baby monkey, the fake monk marched purposefully toward the gates, laughing to himself. Thulu scuttled backwards and hid behind a large pot. As the traitor swung open the golden-plaited door, Thulu waited. Then, just as the door was swinging shut, he darted through the crack. He raced behind a white column and watched as the monk entered the throne room.

“Good king!” the man proclaimed, bowing low so that the monkeys’ basket of fruit nearly dragged the ground as it hung from his arm. “I bring gifts to your majesty!” He plucked a fruit from the basket and presented it to the king, who smiled politely.

Without thinking, Thulu ran forward, his tiny hands and feet pattering on the cold marble floor. As he neared the monk, the man turned around, and seeing the baby monkey, frowned. Thulu leapt from the ground, landing in the basket of fruit with a warning screech.

“He is a liar!” the little monkey screamed. “He is tricking you with stolen jewels and fruit so that you will do his bidding!” And with that, Thulu grabbed a muju fruit and ripped it open, revealing a shimmering red ruby.

But the king did not understand monkey speech. He saw the jewel and gasped. “Good monk!” he exclaimed, “What a noble gift you bring! How generous! And you have brought me many a day! What can I do for you in return?”

Thulu screeched louder. “No! He is a liar! A thief!”

But the king just chuckled at the spirited little monkey sitting atop the muju fruits. “You’re a clever little thing, escaping your gates!” he said with a smile.

With that, a maidservant rushed over and scooped Thulu up in her arms. She carried him outside, back toward his cage. The little monkey cried because he had failed to save his noble king. But as they passed the entrance to the forest, a thought struck him.

“I will visit the witch of the willows!” he thought. “She can make me a goblin, so I can warn the king of this traitor’s evil plan!” And he settled into the maidservant’s arms, satisfied, because he had discovered the motive of the fruit thief, and he was still small enough to slip through his monkey gate.



Author's Note: I based this story mostly on the introduction of Twenty-Two Goblins, where a baby monkey who has escaped his cage steals a fruit that was a gift to the king. The monkey cracks open the fruit and reveals that there is a jewel inside. In the original story, the monkey does this after the monk has left the king's court. This prompts the king to fetch the monk and praise him for the marvelous gifts he's been bringing, and ask what he can do for him. So the monk asks him to meet him in the forest at night, where he then asks the king to fetch a corpse from a tree for him. The king does, but the corpse is possessed by a goblin who tells the king riddles as he carries him, then escapes back to the tree. After twenty-two stories, the goblin decides he is a good king, and reveals that the monk's plan is to trick the king into lying down in "reverence," so the monk can kill him, and become king of the fairies.

I was captivated by the baby monkey from the beginning, even though he was a small part of the story. It was his escape that triggered the chain of events! Telling a story from a baby monkey's perspective also seemed fun and quirky. Then, as I read the end of the Twenty-Two Goblins story, and realized the monk was a villain, I thought it would be interesting to make not only the goblin the savior of the king, but the little monkey as well. I thought about having them collaborate, but then decided it would be interesting if the monkey and the goblin were the same person in different forms. So my story ended up being a "prequal" to the goblin story, where one has to know rest of Twenty-One Goblins to fully make the connection. 

Bibliography: Twenty-Two Goblins, translated by Arthur W. Ryder, with illustrations by Perham W. Nahl (1917)